Sunday, May 1, 2011

What Lies Beneath (OSS)


Photo by Rosa Frei
What lies beneath
the veil of black?
What secrets does
it’s folds hold back?

Eyes show doubt
and lack of trust
Such sadness at
a world unjust.

Or is the face
just a worn down mask
Weathered by the blistering
sand blasting task

7 comments:

  1. Great rhythm and rhyme flowing through the first three stanzas with a nice twist in the form at the end. Very nicely done challenge response!

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  2. there is so much in the eyes of this man...i would love to see the rest of his face to see if it matched the same story...nicely written...

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  3. Absolutely wonderful rhythm! Great poem! Thank you!

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  4. wonderful capture of the photo's words ~

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  5. so much beguiles behind this mans eyes
    ~ brilliantl reflections Lisa ~
    Lib ~ @Libithina

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  6. Good versifyin', my friend. =)

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