Sunday, May 1, 2011

What Lies Beneath (OSS)


Photo by Rosa Frei
What lies beneath
the veil of black?
What secrets does
it’s folds hold back?

Eyes show doubt
and lack of trust
Such sadness at
a world unjust.

Or is the face
just a worn down mask
Weathered by the blistering
sand blasting task

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7 comments:

  1. dustusMay 1, 2011 at 9:40 AM

    Great rhythm and rhyme flowing through the first three stanzas with a nice twist in the form at the end. Very nicely done challenge response!

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  2. Brian MillerMay 1, 2011 at 10:02 AM

    there is so much in the eyes of this man...i would love to see the rest of his face to see if it matched the same story...nicely written...

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  3. Rosa FreiMay 1, 2011 at 10:13 AM

    Absolutely wonderful rhythm! Great poem! Thank you!

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  4. JanaMay 1, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    wonderful capture of the photo's words ~

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  5. John (@bookdreamer)May 1, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Well reflected

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  6. libithinaMay 1, 2011 at 5:27 PM

    so much beguiles behind this mans eyes
    ~ brilliantl reflections Lisa ~
    Lib ~ @Libithina

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  7. Steve IsaakMay 3, 2011 at 2:02 PM

    Good versifyin', my friend. =)

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